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for me such a number of signs in one place looks like spam, one would be enough for 1 place

as for me it can be replaced by swing without stoppers and nothing will change

at first glance it is not clear that there is an anfreeze here, in the design on the contrary only an anfreeze is indicated. Overall, I think you can come up with something more interesting.

this part looks weird, spamming special tiles doesn't make the process more interesting, and spoils the impression of the map

This can be done without a laser.

It is replaced by a freeze and looks better.

skips

this part doesn't seem very interesting to me personally. You need to give a teleporter gun, carry deep to the left, and then the second one needs to back up to do the same.

I don't think there is a need for stoppers, in my opinion they are not worth making 1 hook to the floor, part can be made more interesting

overall, for me, this map was 3/10 for me. many places look repulsive, such as the chaos of teleports or freezes, as in the screenshots. there is a slight imbalance, if I were you, I would try to do something more uniform (for example, if you give a teleport pistol or other weapons, then leave it for a longer period of time) the drag parts are not bad, but there are moments with skips, there is also a lot of useless space on the map (in my opinion)

for example, a map El Quisco . The idea of this map is that you are given a teleport gun to the entire map, the map looks neat, all the special tiles make sense, the map looks cleaner and more pleasant.

This version of the map is kinda outdated, but some problems you mentioned above are still here, I'll work on fixes.

10/10 design, very good job

the draggers dont work properly when played with more than 1

since 1 guy can active for everyone on the server (in team 0)

i agree with

you can replace the laser doors with 2 tiles of freeze if you want to make it harder

there is no reason to have this much place here

if you dont reach the tp right side you would need to swing back to start, you should put some tp in the bottom right corner

also the water is kinda ugly imo+ serves to gameplay purpose and you cant even see it if you dont zoom out x2

the deco is really nice tough

In general: fixed skips mentioned by Ybivawka, some parts got lil rework, replaced laser doors with freeze, filled some useless space. SS 8: Still no idea how to make it better so I currently left it as it was.

I havent seen the map but i like the emoji next to the channel name, 9/10

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u can remove jump refill, it doesnt do anything if you hold jump anyways

if u want t change this part, u can give them tpgun for free so they only need to run through it once, while keeping rest of the part the same

map lowk got some hard parts like the rocket solo and cp18 but its ok for mod 4+ ig

cool map

this gives speedrunners a goofy skip though so dont do it if that bothers u

minor bug fix

I was bored, don't feel like you have to or I'm suggesting you add this in any way

here is screenshot

segjesting

Looks cool, but idk

I was just playing around, you don't have to change your map

how to test maps? should i just download this and open it in ddnet?

on my server

https://discord.com/channels/252358080522747904/1201860080463511612/1246863270237704202

maybe make this thiner, this part isnt so easy and it is in front of finish

maybe by 4 blocks

or 3

rest of map is good i think

u can skip solo and keep telegun(screenshot), then u can keep shotgun, and then i see possibility to be helpful in a kinda big t0 skip, close it

u can shoot straight and pass this faster

maybe mark unfreeze here, idk if it missing or no, but will be helpful to mark it

water quad bug

design bug

design issue

looks kinda strange here

design also

I guess I shouldn't focus so much on the design now, I'll wait for the gameplay fixes first. I marked a few coordinates with bugs that are very noticable: x135 y250 x280 y360 x310 y 356

Thx for the feedback, fixes are coming

Fixed bugs & skips mentioned by

also made this thing a lil thinner

maybe 2 blocks less from right?

imo swing is alright, i ain't really struggled with previous variant as much as current one, even tested a bad angles

like, it's not a novice or low moderate, so it's fair swing

Yes but if you do swing from diffrent position it is not that hard to fail. You can also add some arrows to show players where they should swing or you can somehow force them

1 and 2 - two practically identical swing solos, the parts differ only in structure

3 - I wrote about this earlier, it doesn't look like anything interesting, and the jump refill is not needed at all, if I were you I would delete this part and do something else

Part 1 is much more difficult than Part 2, there is no balance in the actions of the two players, and then there is a solo part.

3. TP 3 is not needed at all. If you fell, and your friend remained in the freeze, then you still lost

u can skip solo tile and keep grenade in future parts, it's already 2nd skip i found where u can keep guns and skip solo tiles completely, u should care on such moments

useless space still not cleaned up

transition into part also bad especially with this amount of space

here also

this part could still be better, it's not very interesting to give 1 tpgun and go back to do the same thing, besides if after giving tpgun you drop deep in teleport, you will have to do the part again, the point of which was to give teleport gun

need unfreeze

the checkpoint is far from the beginning of the part

stoppers can be replaced with other tiles

don't need this ht platform here

unfreeze is not marked everywhere in the design, as in the first screenshot

u can also decrease amount of cp in a few places, looks cleaner

I still don't understand the meaning of this dirty structure, it doesn't look very good to me

a neater structure makes the map more pleasant

Big hole in entity, and a lot of design bugs all over the map. Btw don't focus on it for now, just keep it in mind and fix if you are gonna notice something, now the goal is to make atleast 1 solid rework of the map, pay attention to unused space, smoothness of gameplay and try to make fillers more creative

Made better transitions, got rid of some useless space, parts reworks. Freeze, teleport structure should be more pleasant now, marked unfreeze everywhere. Replaced some unnecessary tiles.

the map looks not small, but in fact there is not much gameplay on it. the map has 4 solo parts with 6 drag parts, fillers are not very long and basically it is just gores with some moves. I really do not like the idea of ​​the map, where many different mechanics are mixed, as for me it is better to give the same telegun gun or grenade for a long time (for example, half of the map without additional weapons, and the second half contains gameplay with them) or even make the map in one style.

in this message i will attach screenshots of the parts that were most interesting to me, but which can still be made better and more interesting

try to avoid special tiles. otherwise such situations may arise. nothing prevents you from making a regular swing here without them, which means they are replaceable

1. not interesting and not balanced, it is better to add an additional drag part in such a situation
2. solo part after a little gameplay, try not to do solo parts so often, after all this is a moderate, not a solo map (and on the map 30% is solo parts)
3. When attempting to boost, a player may exit solo and collide with another player

you can close it with unhook to make it look cleaner

skipable. overall the part is tight, it happens quite often, if I were you I would replace it

1. there is no reason to put teleports behind unhook
2. not interesting
3. you can raise the floor higher and put teleporters on it in such places - the zone is not playable
4. the swing is not very comfortable
5. no unfreeze

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not very easy and convenient move for your level of map (as it seems to me)

try to close such edges

not the best solution for removing excess space, you could have made some kind of swing into the wall, where there would be a hole leading down and it would have looked more logical than teleports

no unfreeze in cto, can be placed on the floor

As was already mentioned, map ain't really provide a lot of gameplay. That's your map as it is, and a few actual parts, for me it's the biggest issue here.

Also want to add a few words about how u filled up space and just added teleports, u can make this big fall a lot more interesting. I've some examples from the map "Lotus" where it's separated into 2 ways and u have to make certain moves before u can continue

even though your map got declined I want to personally felicitate you for that design it's amazing I just had to tell u

Re-use design :)

Tysm!